More Descriptive Writing


The leaves are as red as rubies and the yellow leaves are as bright as sunshine. The colours are bursting out like a rainbow and the leaves are on the foot path way. The trees are losing their leaves and maybe on snowy days they might put on a fire to keep warm. There's a deer under the tree. I can see some grass growing on the cottage and the grass is keeping the gate open.
- Ivy

The leaves are as red as roses and you will feel leaves scattering on the path. The gate looks like it's going to fall. The cottage looks crooked. The yellow leaves are as yellow as sundown. The sky looks like the sea. The colours are booming! The chickens are white and brown. Autumn shimmers with colours. I love Autumn.
- Tilly

WOW! These girls have done a brilliant job.

Room 8

Room 8 is a Year 1 and 2 class at Hampden Street School in Nelson, New Zealand.

3 comments:

  1. What stunning writing girls!!! You are SO clever. Darling Tilly very proud of you my treasure, we just love seeing you write with so many fancy describing words! and what a sweet cottage, I'd like to go there for a wee holiday.

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  2. Tilly, you are a very clever girl and I love the way you described the picture and all the things you noticed. I want to read some more! I am so proud of my granddaughter!
    Love from Guya xx

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  3. Tilly, you are a very clever girl and I love the way you described the picture and all the things you noticed. I want to read some more! I am so proud of my granddaughter!
    Love from Guya xx

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